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Now, lt's Time for the Real Test

A Critique: Example 8

•    Essentially straps come round the front to fasten the sword. But they are omitted because they would look

oppressive.    ’

•    Don't just draw the sword willy-nilly. It is an important object.

•    The hair looks thin. There is this kind ot spiky hairstyle but the revised version looks morę composed.

•    An obscure expression on her face. You can't tell if she is happy or sad. This type ot character clearly has one or the other. It would be unnatural for her to have a sad expression when standing in such a strong courageous pose.

•    There are no ends of the obi. The bleached cotton or gaiters wrapped around her legs are not drawn properly.