Nice start, which clearly states your reason for writing.
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Normally, we say 'the' internet.
This sounds a bit awkward. I suggest something like:
'The biggest pro/advantage of reading in electronic format....
Word form - The usual form is 'multimedia'.
Verb tense - 'you are looking for' would sound more natural here.
This sounds a bit like an afterthought. Is it a serious point you want to keep in?
Wrong or misused preposition - 'Convinced' usually goes with 'of' or 'by'.
Examples:
'...convinced of the need for electronic books.'
'...convinced by the arguments for using electronic books.'
Word form - 'get bored (to tears)' would sound more natural.
Word form - 'nearby'
'number'
Verb tense - 'are used to' or 'are deeply attached to'
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Put a full-stop or at least a semi-colon here.
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Vague reference - I had to read this twice to make sure what 'they' referred to. I thought it was people, not books, at first!
'to' would be the best preposition here.
Well-constructed phrase or sentence
Good choice of vocabulary
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Missing word or words - 'the situation'?
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Verb tense - 'to use'
Or 'at the moment' or 'for the time being'.